By Tim Shorts
Self published on Patreon
OSE levels 1-2
Premise: A simple, water logged dungeon you can use as a drop in adventure location.
What do we get here?
Over six pages we get a dungeon with 6 keyed locations.
Usability/formatting
The adventure could really do with another pass on the writing. There are references to a skull in area 1 which is not mentioned in area one as well as a few general language errors.
Given the shortness of the adventure the formatting of the text is fine for the most part. Paragraphs are short so you can run the whole thing on the fly. There is no use of bolding or nesting of information but for the shortness of the adventure it is probably unnecessary. All needed monster stats are included as needed which is nice.
The small dungeon manages a loop and some faction play which is nice. What is missing is some decent treasure beyond stacks of cash, there are no interesting magic items here.
I do think the general descriptions are pretty evocative helping you build a nice atmosphere. The dungeon itself could do with a bit of history or purpose, the implication is it might be of dwarven construction however that is not really built on.
Portability
There is no backstory to the dungeon so you can easily drop it in any suitably swampy location without problems.
Recommendation
As a first draft this adventure is fine, you can run it and have a decent enough time. With a little clean up and maybe some addition of a bit of depth you could make something really good out of it. For the one dollar cost of the patreon this seems like value for money out of the gate.
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